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    Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    The Haunted Mansion's 40th Anniversay and the family that got to spend the night----has made me think about how cool it would be to be alone in the Haunted Mansion....I've decided to express that with a little poem (no standard form used here--just seeing where it leads)....

    What would you look forward to the most about a night alone in the Haunted Mansion?....
    If you could go anywhere and do anything?
    If you could spend the night?
    Or walk through the ride all alone?
    Share those thoughts here

    As i slowly create an unbelievable story of such a night. (Rough Draft version ---there may be mispelling ,,,Etc..)

    Alone in the Haunted Mansion (part 1)

    It was a foggy night
    Unnatural one might say
    For a Friday evening in May

    Through a series on events
    That shall remain unspoken
    Backstage bribes?
    And pledges that were broken?
    I had the opportunity to spend a night
    Alone in the Haunted Mansion
    What a spooky delight.

    Alone I stood
    In front of its iron gates
    A rusty key in a nervous hand
    I turned the key inside the gates metal plates

    As I did the fog rolled in
    Off the the Rivers of America
    Crawling up out of the water
    Windings up the pathway
    Racing past me toward the Mansion Entrance

    I approached the Mansion
    Shuffling my feet through the fog
    Uncertain of each step
    Passing by the horseless hearse
    Carefully up the steps
    The doors already open
    The fog leading the way inside
    Like some supernatural guide

    The foyer was completely dark
    The candlelights did not flicker.
    As I stepped into the room
    The fog grew thicker
    Filling the room up to my eyes
    I thought I heard a whisper
    It said “Surprise”
    Then back outside the thick fog went
    My nerves already were fairly spent
    Alone in the darkness of the Haunted Mansion I stood
    “I’ve got a bad feeling about this”
    “This can’t be good”

    (To Be continued)
    BAC 08/11/2009

    Last edited by brad chowen; 08-11-2009 at 11:04 AM. Reason: Correct duplicate word

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    I always love to think about being alone in this ride. I genuinely think it would instill fear for a while. I love this ride

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    Part 2 The Elevator

    I wandered over to the elevator
    The Doors were closed
    I had to pry them open
    The elevator was in full stretch
    The only light was the flickering image of the hanging body

    There was no sound at all
    The exit door was sealed shut
    Maybe I should retreat now?
    Go back the way I came?
    But that door too was now shut
    I was trapped alone
    With only the hanging body to keep me company
    And he wasn’t very talkative

    For an hour I sat in the room
    Trying not to panic
    The hanging body was slowly swinging
    Back and forth from the ceiling
    Neither door would open
    As if unseen hands held them closed from the other side

    Up again I looked
    The body was no longer there
    All that remained was a dangling rope
    Where could the body have gone?
    I scanned the ceiling with each flicker of light
    It was nowhere to be seen.
    Then I saw an image
    Something obscuring one of the stretching paintings
    With the next flicker of light it was gone
    Was it my imagination?

    I heard a crash
    Something hit the floor
    A scraping noise
    Clawing across the carpet
    Coming toward me
    I backed up to the wall
    I wanted to scream

    (To be Continued)
    BAC 08/11/2009

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    Excellent poem so far, keep it up.

    I would love to spend the night in HM and just be able to walk through the entire ride at my own pace checking out all the small details and craftsmanship that you can't really see normally. It would also be great to see all the backstage areas such as the control tower and underneath the doombuggies in the ballroom where all the AA's are located. I think I would also sleep in the ballroom maybe in front of the fireplace or in the small room up on the landing between the dueling portraits. But if I really had that much freedom to wander around and check everything out for myself, sleep would be the last thing I would want to do -

    "I Want That Simple Life"

    B.F.F.=Brian Fyfe Forever
    4-8-1983 to 4-28-2010


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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    Nice Bruce Campbell pic...

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    The Hallway

    I couldn’t see it
    As I pulled with all my strength at the door
    It was crawling toward me
    Its nails gouging through the carpet
    Scratching to the floor below
    Getting closer

    I closed my eyes
    I could sense its bony hands around my ankles
    The unseen force pulling me to the ground
    I looked up the Body once again was hanging
    Hanging harmlessly from the ceiling
    Seen through flashes of light

    I looked to the door it was open
    I stood up and stumbled out into the hall
    Knocking over the ropes that hold guest back
    Back from the Portaits
    The Portraits remained in darkness
    Not changing as they normally did

    I hurried past them towards
    The Faces that follow you
    They were in darkness as well
    Darkened eyes turning to watch me run by
    They whispered as I passed
    “Hurry now”

    I approached the Motionless Doom Buggies
    I wanted to exit
    I looked towards where the Doom Buggies entered
    It was walled off
    I turned toward the track
    Trying the Special exit doors
    They were all locked
    So into the heart of the ride I went

    (To Be Continued)
    BAC 08/11/2009

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    Excellent!
    ...After a YEAR I finally was able to figure out my password again! I'm baaack! Woohoo!(:
    Disney is my life <3
    Thank Walt for all he did! <3
    Future Imagineer <3
    Keep Disney the way Walt intended it!!


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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    A walkthrough attraction

    I made my way up the ramp
    Darting around the Vehicles
    The suit of armour clattered as I passed
    I looked down the never ending hallway
    It looked so real
    It called out to me
    “Come this way”

    I ran into the hall towards the floating candle
    No matter how fast I ran
    The candle remained out of reach
    A door to my side opened
    Could this be the way out?
    I entered the door which lead to a stairwell

    A metal set of stairs
    Going down in a spiral
    Covered in dust
    I was backstage now
    Cast Members only
    Heading downstairs.


    Down I went
    The Stairwell looked out over faintly lit rooms
    Mechanical levers
    Old dingy ropes
    Dirty mechanics rags
    Down and down I went
    There was a door at the bottom
    The door was locked

    (To Be Continued)
    BAC 08/11/2009

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    My own private tomb

    I stood at the bottom of the stairs
    Looking up the curving metal steps
    They seemed all twisted
    Somehow smaller
    Tighter
    More Claustrophobic
    Heading up into infinite darkness
    I dare not go back
    I pounded on the door
    As I heard the metal above me creak
    Someone was coming down the stairs


    The Stairwell moved with each footstep
    I clawed at the wooden door
    Turned the knob again and again
    “Let me out of here Let me out of here”
    But the door wouldn’t open
    And the footsteps grew nearer
    The metal stairwell shook violently
    Like it was falling apart
    I pushed on the door
    The wood gave like it was a living thing

    The footsteps grew louder
    I pushed and door broke
    Splintered into a million pieces
    I stood up another door lay open in front of me
    I walked through
    Locking it behind me

    (To Be Continued)
    BAC 08/11/2009

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    Having a Ball

    By the faint light of a row of computers
    I saw them
    Held in an eternal dance
    Never letting go
    Forever together

    I wandered around the animatronic figures
    The dancers of the ballroom
    So creepy yet beautiful on this side of the glass
    Forgotten for a moment the figure that followed me
    I stared in marvel at these human like creations

    Immortal beings
    Revolving on life’s turntable
    I walked among them
    Wondering what it would be like

    Metal
    Plastic
    Rubber
    Electrical wiring

    I stared out into the ballroom
    Someone was out there
    Night crew
    Those mysterious men
    That wander the underground tunnels
    Waiting for the park to close
    Before they go about there work

    I pounded on the glass trying to get his attention
    Can’t he see me?

    (To be continued)
    BAC 08/11/2009

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    He was replacing a light
    I waved and gestured
    But he didn’t see me
    I grabbed a chair and smashed it against the glass
    The glass cracked a tiny little crack
    The Night Crew man turned
    He held a flashlight scanning it across the window
    He called something into his walkie talkie then turned and left

    I wandered back amongst the figures
    They began to move
    Spinning around
    I was caught amid their dance
    Dodging them as the danced around me

    I searched the room
    I couldn’t find a door
    Not even the one I had entered
    Nothing made sense
    I looked out into the ballroom
    Beyond the shadows of the whirling animatronics

    It looked like real people were out in the ballroom
    Dancing
    Singing
    Laughing
    Drinking

    I walked back over to the glass window
    Smashing the chair into the crack
    Splinters of glass rained to the floor
    I stepped through the hole
    Into an empty ballroom

    (To be continued)
    BAC 8/11/2009

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    Quote Originally Posted by brad chowen View Post
    With only the hanging body to keep me company
    And he wasn’t very talkative
    i found this line very amusing
    -plagued

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    It would be scarier if he did talk....But it is funnier that he doesn't.
    at this point he is just stuck in a dark room.

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion


    I looked back at the window
    The window was no longer broken
    Yet I stood in a pile of broken glass
    The Animatronics were still moving
    But no longer in a dance
    They gathered at the window
    Pounding on it

    Through the windows that led out I hurried
    Leaving the madness of the ballroom
    It lead to a backstage area
    I ran down a corridor through another doorway
    It opened inside the graveyard
    But the graveyard was empty
    Tombstones rocked back and forth
    But all the figures were gone
    The Singing busts were faceless

    I wandered down the track towards the exit
    Working my way around the Doom Buggies
    Where did all the figures go?
    They can’t all be in the shop can they?
    Then the Vehicles began to move
    I darted across to the other side
    There they are……

    (To be continued)
    BAC 08/11/2009

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    Re: Inspired by the thought of being alone in the Haunted Mansion

    “Please Remain in your Doom Buggies”
    Was playing over the speakers
    As the Singing busts began to move their lips
    Down the slope from the attic they came
    Each Doom Buggie filled with a frightful spook
    Coming closer and closer to where I stood
    Frozen in place as if my foot was nailed to the floor

    They were all singing the song now
    “Please Remain in your Doom Buggies”
    Blared over the speakers trying to drown them out
    I turned and ran
    Darting out of the room
    As I passed the mirrors
    The hitchhiking ghosts mocked me
    Standing side by side
    In every mirror they stood
    Smiling
    Laughing
    Pointing

    (To be continued)
    BAC 08/11/2009

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